Thursday, August 27, 2009

The Seeing Telescope by Javarne

11 comments:

Herbert said...

I think that your speech had good voice expression and great tone just need to work on speed.

Aniva said...

This was a different and interesting topic. I like'd how you had a loud and clear voice. Something to work on could be to add more interesting facts!

Angela said...

I think your news was AWESOME it had alot of great facts about our future telescope,you had a great voice it was loud and clear.

I don't think you have anything to work on .Your news was stupendous.

luke said...

Your movie was very well produced, well done.One thing you could try. make you’re talking finish at the exact same time as your movie.

angelica said...

You have a great interesting story. I like how you had drew your picture and how you said it in a clear voice. You need to work on more interesting things that would catch people's attention.

Meleane said...

I think this story is cool and the fact of people seeing things in the past. AWESOME. How would that be? But yeah, story's cool, pictures great and I love the topic. I think you should add in some more information about this telescope, cause it's an interesting topic.

Neivi said...

I think your movie was totally AMAZING, your opinion was well thought and it was an effective title. Your picture was absolutely AWESOME and your topic was very interesting and suitable for other student to read. I think you should add some more info because it's an interesting topic but overall WELL DONE!!

Crystal said...

That was a great piece of news you did I like how you put some wonderful pictures to support your story. Next time try and speak a little bit slowly, but it is eye catching.

Tepania said...

i liked the idea of this story,but it needed alot more information and it needed to be clearer.

Maka Siamani said...

Hae this is a cool one.um you don't know me but I'm from Auckland Girls Grammer.

Jamima said...

I hope it's all true so I could see the past as well!