You have a great interesting story. I like how you had drew your picture and how you said it in a clear voice. You need to work on more interesting things that would catch people's attention.
I think this story is cool and the fact of people seeing things in the past. AWESOME. How would that be? But yeah, story's cool, pictures great and I love the topic. I think you should add in some more information about this telescope, cause it's an interesting topic.
I think your movie was totally AMAZING, your opinion was well thought and it was an effective title. Your picture was absolutely AWESOME and your topic was very interesting and suitable for other student to read. I think you should add some more info because it's an interesting topic but overall WELL DONE!!
That was a great piece of news you did I like how you put some wonderful pictures to support your story. Next time try and speak a little bit slowly, but it is eye catching.
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I think that your speech had good voice expression and great tone just need to work on speed.
This was a different and interesting topic. I like'd how you had a loud and clear voice. Something to work on could be to add more interesting facts!
I think your news was AWESOME it had alot of great facts about our future telescope,you had a great voice it was loud and clear.
I don't think you have anything to work on .Your news was stupendous.
Your movie was very well produced, well done.One thing you could try. make you’re talking finish at the exact same time as your movie.
You have a great interesting story. I like how you had drew your picture and how you said it in a clear voice. You need to work on more interesting things that would catch people's attention.
I think this story is cool and the fact of people seeing things in the past. AWESOME. How would that be? But yeah, story's cool, pictures great and I love the topic. I think you should add in some more information about this telescope, cause it's an interesting topic.
I think your movie was totally AMAZING, your opinion was well thought and it was an effective title. Your picture was absolutely AWESOME and your topic was very interesting and suitable for other student to read. I think you should add some more info because it's an interesting topic but overall WELL DONE!!
That was a great piece of news you did I like how you put some wonderful pictures to support your story. Next time try and speak a little bit slowly, but it is eye catching.
i liked the idea of this story,but it needed alot more information and it needed to be clearer.
Hae this is a cool one.um you don't know me but I'm from Auckland Girls Grammer.
I hope it's all true so I could see the past as well!
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